Suteki da neShe weeps with tears as pure as any spring,
This is a beautiful piece that will certainly get some on to think on it. I wonder why only a few notice this? Certainly I didn't!
It's like we can envision some sort or fantasy- like scene when we read every word per line.
"Does every happy moment stay within the waves?" Now, that is a very excellent question! Does it,really? Does it not? How should I know? >_<
all in all, I like/ love this piece very much. Does this describe a mythical being? Even if it doesn't, I feel that it is.
And why the heckz did I miss that link?!
Thanks for the critique...I don't think that this poem is perfect by any stretch of the imagination (certainly undeserving of your five stars in everything), but I'm glad that you enjoyed it and that it made you think.